Different Views of Success in Rap Culture Different Views of Success in Rap Culture," is a comparison paper that has much room to be improved grammatically, and needs to be better centered on the thesis. The paper compared the different views of success in rap music culture that are portrayed in the songs "Juicy" by Notorious B.I.G., and "The Way I Am" by Eminem. The essay was consistently polluted with information irrelevant to …
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…creating better flow between the sentences (Harris 174). The following corrections significantly improve "Different Views of Success in Rap Culture," and allow a stronger argument on behalf of the thesis. Information irrelevant to the thesis, repetition, and punctuation and grammatical errors were all consistent problems through out the essay. It is essential for a paper to flow, and to make sense to the reader. Without the reader's interest and comprehension, the thesis and argument are futile.